01-28-2003, 06:46 PM
#1
Level 6 - Very Deep Thinker
Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Hell...or something like it :)
Epiphany
The poison sting
Is fatal yet
Nothing has come
To you
The piercing stone
Has severed deep
Within the mount
Of you
And slowly you
Fall deep within
The epitome of
The forasken
Slowly all
The tears you cried
the words unsaid
Came pouring out
Your blood has shed
Your ego bruised
There's nothing in it
For you
This will always be
And will become
The stains of your
Epiphany
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01-28-2003, 06:53 PM
#2
$2 + a potato = $2
Join Date: Nov 2002
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yoda says: " i like methinks "
ah yes i do, me likes
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01-28-2003, 07:45 PM
#3
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Join Date: Dec 2002
Location: Los Angeles
I like :)
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These thoughts and the strain I am under"
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01-29-2003, 05:12 AM
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simplistic yet fathomless
i enjoyed that piece. its simplicity is what i like the most. you dont need a lot of words to express an emotion. i wrote a simple poem like that on here. its under subtle intervention in letters. keep writing these and never stop expressing yourself.
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01-29-2003, 08:09 AM
#5
Level 4 - Thinker
Join Date: Dec 2002
Location: Toronto, Canada
Awesome work - never give it up. I like it especially because it's a departure from the bonds of a more conventional style. Thanks for sharing :)
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