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Old 01-28-2003, 06:46 PM   #1
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Epiphany

The poison sting
Is fatal yet
Nothing has come
To you

The piercing stone
Has severed deep
Within the mount
Of you

And slowly you
Fall deep within
The epitome of
The forasken

Slowly all
The tears you cried
the words unsaid
Came pouring out

Your blood has shed
Your ego bruised
There's nothing in it
For you

This will always be
And will become
The stains of your
Epiphany
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Old 01-28-2003, 06:53 PM   #2
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Old 01-28-2003, 07:45 PM   #3
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I like :)
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Old 01-29-2003, 05:12 AM   #4
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simplistic yet fathomless

i enjoyed that piece. its simplicity is what i like the most. you dont need a lot of words to express an emotion. i wrote a simple poem like that on here. its under subtle intervention in letters. keep writing these and never stop expressing yourself.
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Old 01-29-2003, 08:09 AM   #5
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Awesome work - never give it up. I like it especially because it's a departure from the bonds of a more conventional style. Thanks for sharing :)
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