11-11-2007, 12:42 PM
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Vapor Trail
I am just an Oort cloud
leaving this dusty port
hitching a ride on a newly formed comet
destination unknown
Traveling this way
can blur your senses
forming a stellar wake
with no concern of consequences
Crushing a lost satellite
waving as I pass Saturn
leaving an everlasting vapor trail
orbiting in a superior fashion
Accretion intensifying
all the while
reflecting visions
with an illuminating style
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11-11-2007, 02:11 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Holy Halloumi!
This was worth the fustrationz, imo.
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11-11-2007, 02:15 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
*H O W L S*
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11-11-2007, 04:23 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Quote:
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Shax
Holy Halloumi!
Quote:
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Shax
*H O W L S*
LOL
You're too funny.
Thank you Percy.
Quote:
Originally Posted by
Shax
This was worth the fustrationz, imo.
QFT
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11-11-2007, 04:42 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
You nailed it. I take this method of transportation every day. It's what I do when i'm not paying attention to people.
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11-11-2007, 04:43 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
cheers
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11-11-2007, 09:51 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
meow
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11-12-2007, 08:52 AM
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Re: Vapor Trail
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You're too funny.
*tonez it down*
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11-12-2007, 10:00 AM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Bumped for sheer awesomeness.
Also, jasmina loves your poem, but is currently unavaliable to comment on it herself.
Last edited by Shax; 11-12-2007 at 10:01 AM ..
Reason: fucksticks
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11-16-2007, 07:05 AM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Thanks Shax, biff, toolhed, Wolfie and Jasmina who was unavailable for comment, I appreciate it.
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11-16-2007, 03:07 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Really good writing. I love it. The second verse is awesome.
Just out of interest, how long did it take you to write it?
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11-29-2007, 05:25 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
It's well past morning.
:(
::chirps::
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Re: Vapor Trail
/bump
My favorite of yours lotus.
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Re: Vapor Trail
Very nice, the rythmn of the words.
I especially like the line, 'leaving an everlasting vapor trail.'
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01-07-2009, 12:43 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
Once around the Sun, cruising, climbing.
Jupiter cyclops winks at me, yeah, he knows who's driving.
Hit neutral in the tail of a comet.
Let the vortex pull my weight.
Push the seat back a little lower.
Watch light bend in the blower.
Planets align.
A king is born.
Dodge Swinger.
Jesus on the dashboard.
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01-07-2009, 03:54 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
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/bump
My favorite of yours lotus.
Thanks for the bump Leigh-Cheri, this is my favorite as well.
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01-07-2009, 03:55 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
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Very nice, the rythmn of the words.
I especially like the line, 'leaving an everlasting vapor trail.'
Glad that you like :)
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01-07-2009, 03:58 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
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Once around the Sun, cruising, climbing.
Jupiter cyclops winks at me, yeah, he knows who's driving.
Hit neutral in the tail of a comet.
Let the vortex pull my weight.
Push the seat back a little lower.
Watch light bend in the blower.
Planets align.
A king is born.
Dodge Swinger.
Jesus on the dashboard.
Good song!
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01-07-2009, 04:42 PM
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Re: Vapor Trail
It amuses me.
And it also made me want to read the Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy, for some reason.
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