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Old 06-05-2006, 02:43 AM   #1
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Question of eternity

First off I just discovered this site and i think this creative sharing forum is awesome.
Secondly this is straight up a love song i wrote and it meens alot to me and i would like to share it.

Maybe if i could free my mind
I wouldn't have to waste my time
Caring for your tragic heart
And trying to tear your thoughts apart
Understand is so heavy
I tried to carry it before i was ready
I feel it slipping so very very steady
This question of eternity

Maybe i will lose a friend
But it'll be ok in the end
When i stare into your ocean eyes
And i begin to remember why
Why i exist in the place
And why i am such a disgrace
And i why i cant leave your pretty face
A question of eternity

Now that i have had a taste
Of your sweet embrace
I dont think ill ever leave this place
Unless its you that i have to chase
Did you think i was so naive
That you would get me to believe
That You could ever love me?
Dreams of eternity
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Old 06-05-2006, 11:54 AM   #2
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Re: Question of eternity

you write similar to me...nice poem (song) though
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Old 06-05-2006, 12:24 PM   #3
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thank you that meens alot
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you should check out some of my poems...alot of them are angry but usually thats how i feel when i go on here hah
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Old 06-05-2006, 01:06 PM   #5
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Re: Question of eternity

nice switch to dreams of eternity.... it's a catchy song, not an eloquent mindfuck, but i still like it.

i like the theme... maybe because im a girl and think its sweet, but eternity is a hard concept to grasp. It's almost impossible to concieve. I feel that the word "eternity" has a special glow to it, and by incorporating it in your writing, it adds a sublime feeling to the theme.
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Old 06-05-2006, 02:55 PM   #6
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alot of them are angry but usually thats how i feel when i go on here hah
i love angry poems
i love sad poems
i love happy poems

its all good, everyone has these same emotions and i don't think there is a better way to deal or express these emotions then by writing. i will definatly check out your works.

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but eternity is a hard concept to grasp. It's almost impossible to concieve
i def. agree with you. what makes us so fucked up all the time is that we are all striving for that person we can love forever and a lot of us can't find he or she. most of us don't know what its like to have that eternal feeling, but we all know we want it.
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Old 06-09-2006, 12:22 AM   #7
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oh yea i forgot to put

www.myspace.com/danpiotrowski

if you wanna check out the song that goes with the words
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