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Old 01-08-2005, 03:04 AM   #1
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Breathless

Breathless

Swathed horizons swallow up everything whole.
Catering whims, alternating moods’,
sheepish grays screaming like a banshee.
Selfless pride turns the tables in rancid forms.
Silicone's black flowering from a lone core-

Crimson tongue, devilish eyes, froths bubbling . . .
Liquids’ passive gold.
“Cut off the nose despite the face.
Tearless cries, vanity’s darkest day.”
Learn to live scared and broken or die facing
the sear in strife’ hand.
Self pity, clepsydras’ doctrine-
A voice calling the insane home.

Slip further.
Slips further away the hands cannot reach.
Synthetic fibers, frayed strands, the heart’s
rolling over falling apart.
The nocturnal soul seethes like an endless sieve.
Poison blankets the existing passageways.
“Trapped there is no way out.”
Tick . . .
Tick . . .
T-i-c-k . . .
“Time fades within each faltering breath.”
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Old 01-08-2005, 06:47 PM   #2
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Re: Breathless

"The nocturnal soul seethes like an endless sieve"

That line is genius.
The rest... I don't know, really.
The aim seems sort of ambiguous to me.
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