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Old 11-24-2004, 12:12 PM   #1
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Wallowing

autumn rains have left me for better things
the summer holds my only dreams
somber reflection of my eternity
dreary encounters for my disposal

tainted like the rest
my hopes lays in your eager chest
wherever i may roam
my hope will always leave with you

the evening glade holds my only visions
void of hate in all its glory
cascading fortune may ruin the scenery
overthrown mortality
afflicted children of the dusk
sterilized and sifted in twilight
in the eclipse of eternal seclusion
i pray in the night for a reverie

"what am i supposed to say?"
what was i supposed to say?
say you'll take me either way
fiend of inclination
creep no more within my chest

tainted like the rest
my hopes lays in your eager chest
wherever i may roam
my hope will always leave with you

fooled into submission, my mind is lured in
fascinating optics crawl into my skin
left me for utopia, sinner through the night
your perfection is unhallowed through the peaking of the sunlight
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Old 11-25-2004, 09:45 AM   #2
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Re: Wallowing

Wow, I really love this, especially the last line.
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Old 11-25-2004, 12:56 PM   #3
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Re: Wallowing

this poem kept my attention very well, i like this
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Old 11-27-2004, 02:49 AM   #4
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Re: Wallowing

I'm a fool. The title of the song is "Willowing". I forgot I even posted it here. Thanks though!
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Old 11-27-2004, 06:45 AM   #5
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Re: Wallowing

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Originally Posted by Graced Imagery
wherever i may roam
get lars on drums and you'll be a-ok.
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Old 11-27-2004, 12:39 PM   #6
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Re: Wallowing

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reflection
i guess maynard will have to join me as well
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