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Old 07-03-2009, 12:45 AM   #1
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untitled

Another road of distraction,
a realistic paradise an illusion
leaves change colors, trees start singing
the waterfall reverses course.
Animals evacuate, thunder crashes
forcing the mountains to wail their cries.
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Old 07-04-2009, 08:43 PM   #2
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Re: untitled

It's a little choppy imo.

I like the idea (whatever it may be), in any case.
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