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A Christmas Poem for L
Winter's singularity
Into which all days and thoughts slip languidly
like snowflakes through a rich
streetlight glow or onto the
tip of your tongue
Through time and the ringing
of spoon against spode
Warm teacups of thought
brought gently up to your lips
Holy hours suffused with song
and celebration; filled with that
amber stasis and deep, blissful
comfort of your soft cheek.
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01-07-2009, 12:17 PM
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
Someone critique this, then.
And not just some "Yeah this has words and gives me good vibes" kind of crap.
I'll likely try something on Jayar's Dick Diary and Gretal's bit later.
Seriously, though. This is a challenge.
Contribute or GTFO.
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01-07-2009, 12:20 PM
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
Yeah, this has words and gives me good vibes.
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01-07-2009, 12:28 PM
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
That comma saved you.
Better yet, don't confuse posting another poem with a critique.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
I'm flattered.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
How so?
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
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Agreed.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
I don't think he behaved badly in that thread.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
I don't disagree.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
that dude could be sort of a dick, though.
but, when credit was due, he did give it to you.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
Chef Ramsey is a dick too, but he brings out the best in people.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
Exactly
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
I can make great risotto.
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dicks are for assholes
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
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dicks are for assholes
i don't know what you and your buddies do for fun, but you guys party way too fucking hard for me.
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
you party limp?
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
i party fast, i swing limp, and i work hard.
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alright, thank you
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
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i party fast, i swing limp, and i work hard.
i lold at that
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
unban moloch under the condition he does something about his permanent male PMS
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
i have a feeling at least two people in this thread are moloch so it's ok
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i have a feeling at least two people in this thread are moloch so it's ok
who?
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
idk, i just wanted a bit of attention
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
i like your fancy custom title.
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06-12-2009, 08:54 AM
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
i like your boobs
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Re: A Christmas Poem for L
hmm
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i like your boobs
*Chirp*
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