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Old 04-24-2006, 11:33 AM   #1
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"Inner Eye"

knock, knock....

My mind's eye opens..
An acre of thoughts lava throughout every branch within.
Bitsy bubbles pop and images flash across my visual sense
Hands and knees tho eye crawls among the glow of
thoughts that flow.......
Eger to find the one answer that glooms a sunny day

Why is it so quite among my mind, but my being is
overwhelmed with endless contradictions.
The ground tho eye crawls on is soft and slippery, is
this where my heart gains the vulnerability and doubt

I see the edge of my mind..... it's an endless sight of
darkness. What lies behind the dark sheet that
binds my sight....

Tho eye slowly rises and sees the thumping of my mind going
up and down..... Staggering as tho eye bypasses
flows of memories.....
Seeing into the flow of thoughts, tho eye
drops down to my mind. Tho eye lies upon thoughts.
where does the beam of sanity lie.
Sight clutches to moistened thoughts I fight to find a way
to redirect my map of being....

another day has passed as i crawl among my mind.




This is my shot at poetry....Not so great, but just ideas roaming about in my head....hmmmm........
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Old 04-24-2006, 01:59 PM   #2
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Re: "Inner Eye"

poetry is an expression of emotion, only you can be the judge of goodness , other people may or may not like it . Do you like it ?
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Old 04-24-2006, 08:01 PM   #3
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Re: "Inner Eye"

I do....
There's a lot of confusion and emotional destress that I feel....and this is pretty much the way it came out....
Thanks for stoppin by and reading.....
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Old 04-25-2006, 05:38 PM   #4
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Re: "Inner Eye"

I like typing ... too.
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