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Old 04-13-2010, 11:29 PM   #1
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Fight for their right

It's 3am and machine guns are going off in all directions
mowing the enemy down without hesitation
saturated boots are weighing down
kill another, then a dozen more

Heads being decapitated
senses obviated, the sand and hills are cover
palm trees catch splattered blood
on the run were told to kill kill kill

Life is being ended by this tool of power
do what they say
say what they do
programed reactions don't think, just do

Clothes absorbed with mud bugs blood
and more blood
do what they tell you
kill kill kill

Repetitive nature
even though this is not nature
mow em' down and take em' out
don't think, just do

Be all you can be
laugh out loud
fucking pathetic
programmed to move on, do what your told to do

Are you right?
are they wrong?
circle the herd
removing that threat

Life is nothing
you don't know them
you don't owe them
isn't war fun?
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Old 04-14-2010, 12:46 AM   #2
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Re: Fight for their right

Nice.

Reminds of how my grandpa felt about war. He was a Marine and fought in the Pacific during WWII.
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Old 04-14-2010, 01:05 AM   #3
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Nice.

Reminds of how my grandpa felt about war. He was a Marine and fought in the Pacific during WWII.
Yeah, my grandfather was in WWII as well. He's no longer with our family and deceased from excess cigarette smoking, but luckily he was only a guard for prisoners and didn't have to kill anyone (as far as I know).
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Old 04-15-2010, 04:06 AM   #4
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Re: Fight for their right

good stuff.

my grandpa's brother was shot and killed in WWII. constant fear and serious survival issues; i don't know how they (people) can/could handle it.

War puts me at a loss for words. But i liked yours.
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Old 04-15-2010, 04:37 PM   #5
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i like that
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Old 04-18-2010, 06:10 AM   #6
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i like that
1st post of the century.

Lotus, this draws up a very young, angry Cheshire cat in my head and i think that's tits.
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Old 04-18-2010, 11:26 PM   #7
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ignore the smoke and smile..
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ignore the smoke and smile..
NO

no

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Re: Fight for their right

toss another body in the mass grave, finish chewing that stale jerky as you fumble for your cigarette tucked lazily behind a sweaty ear.
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try to remember a time when your feet didn't itch like hell
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i'm thinking of a certain foot medicine endorsed by john madden right now
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Re: Fight for their right

This is great lotus. My brother is getting ready to deploy for Afghanistan, so this really hits home.
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This is great lotus. My brother is getting ready to deploy for Afghanistan, so this really hits home.
Yikes, I am sorry to hear that.

This poem is really dark. I guess that doesnt need to be pointed out. I wonder if the author was writing about war/violence from an american soldiers perspective or just war in general.
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