Whole
and I am glad to experience you
ideal
you are flawless
adept, and beyond comparison
You never cease to bowl me over
I will never fail you
Ideal
your exactly what I was created for
whole
I would live after life, forever alive
Never dying or resting
so you will never be alone.
I will surround you.
Truth
it's all the same in the end
aware
You're a classic example of irrefutable damage
that love can cause
You blur the lines between pain and emotion
I never know when I am bleeding or crying
Aware
My eyes must have blinked
truth
Your an illusion of a utopian life that will never be
because of reality
but despite your pillage of desire
I still have passion for your kind.
I like how the "whole" relationship embodies the ideal parts of a relationship. And an ideal relationship must be whole. The truth is derived from the awareness of the situation and the awareness allows a glimpse of the truth. All parts are inter dependent
Are these degrees linear as im seeing them here? Is it before a relationship or even in the beginning there is a complete ignorance of anything but the ideal and therfore a fantasy image is created which lures you blindly into the situation. You see the way you think it SHOULD be and thus it is the ideal form but in reality the relationship is never ideal it is filled with problems and new thoughts and directions. You still have desire for the ideal and feel that it should still exist within the imperfect and thus your feeling/yearning is never satiated?
After glancing at it again I noted something else you did. You started each section with an idea then a single sentence related directly to it...followed by the second idea and its definition or revelation. Very well done. Did you begin by writing each section as a whole and then switching the lines out or was this down intentionally to begin with?
Originally posted by ShackledEidolon
Are these degrees linear as im seeing them here?
Its very good...I enjoy the format you chose
Yes. It is like it says, the four degrees to a relationship. You meet someone, think they're perfect, then reality sets in and you move on to the next relationship.
Thank you. :)
Quote:
Originally posted by ShackledEidolon After glancing at it again I noted something else you did. You started each section with an idea then a single sentence related directly to it...followed by the second idea and its definition or revelation. Very well done. Did you begin by writing each section as a whole and then switching the lines out or was this down intentionally to begin with?
Originally posted by raiSINgirl420 Aware
My eyes must have blinked
truth
Your an illusion of a utopian life that will never be
because of reality
now that is beauty.
i really like the format you used, is it your own?
nice work.
Yes the format is my own. I try to use a different one everytime I write something. Thank you very much for the kind words, I will try to post more of my work in the coming days.
