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Old 07-19-2018, 07:19 AM   #1
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Tomorrow

Lost some body parts
Dancing with a train
They all grew back
Sitting in the rain
In refracted light
Saw vines as veins
Tied up I cut
And felt no pain
It wasn't me really
Copied thoughts in my brain
Still it feels sort of real
What is what? Am I sane?
I asked an oak tree. Some leaves, some bark.
I asked passing cars. A dog in a park.
I called to passing strangers I thought were neighbours.
I asked a rain drop
I caught in a jar, they all said;
Just relax for a spell
And ask again later.
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Old 07-21-2018, 05:19 PM   #2
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Re: Tomorrow

I like it. It gets you caught up in a weird, fast-paced frenzy wondering what really constitutes our selves.
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Old 07-21-2018, 07:39 PM   #3
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Re: Tomorrow

I like it as well.

Mikey had a facial scar and Bobby was a racist
They were all in love dying they were doin' it in Texas
Tommy played piano like a kid out in the rain
Then he lost his leg in Dallas he was dancin' with the train
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Old 07-22-2018, 02:30 PM   #4
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Re: Tomorrow

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Old 07-25-2018, 03:09 AM   #5
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Re: Tomorrow

This is good. I instantly feel fantastic hues of Alice in Wonderland, Pink Floyd,Trainspotting, Sgt Peppers, and Primus' "Mary the Ice Cube."

An Absurd and rotoscoped version of reality. Now I see inside your head. . .
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Old 07-25-2018, 07:03 AM   #6
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i read it out loud
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Re: Tomorrow

definitely got a psychedelic feel to it. I guess you could say "ask again later" means when you come down from it. I see it this way cause people and things responded the same way... things like rain drops don't communicate under normal circumstances. It reads very smooth, very cool.
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I could read Gonzo's written work all day long.
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*hugs*
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