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Old 10-30-2009, 11:29 AM   #1
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grasping a forgetfull memory

scaling down away from the memory of my old god
realizing falsehoods and oblivious fear sown in ignorance
pain non-existent in my philosophical outlook
pain so abundant in my flesh and bones
realizing the microcosm as omnipotent
seeing the reflection in the whole
breaking away from the bonds of social conformity

the fear grabs for a while ripping a hollow nest
for faded memories to fill
only subsiding when i have fallen upon my own blade
to rise again takes the strength of organic individuality
the courage to face the unknown and unlikely
the ability to walk through fire scorched yet reborn
without worry
without predjudice
comprehending paradox is always a first time event

eternally overlapping
multiple possibilities
infinite probabilities
such a beautiful dissonant ocean of chaos
a being of light
fed all we know through a singular connected spark
light destroying light feeding its own agenda
the new drug is found in the form of distant impersonal drama


i continue to climb forward
only receiving enlightenment when i comprehend this personal journey,
such a sweet but wasted taste of a complete moment
as in the end i was the same as what came before the beginning
i say all this with sturdy foundation and i know one thing
nothing can destroy us, the matter we consist of and the consciousness we possess
both are eternal but also eternally changing to fit the need of now
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Old 10-30-2009, 12:08 PM   #2
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Re: grasping a forgetfull memory

I like the course this takes. My only suggestion in that you use punctuation so that it reads a bit more smoothly without having to go back a line every now and then to figure out how a sentence reads.
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Old 10-30-2009, 02:24 PM   #3
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Re: grasping a forgetfull memory

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I like the course this takes. My only suggestion in that you use punctuation so that it reads a bit more smoothly without having to go back a line every now and then to figure out how a sentence reads.
thank you and yeah i was a bit hasty in posting but ill take the tip
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Old 10-31-2009, 06:17 PM   #4
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Re: grasping a forgetfull memory

yeah, certainly dig the content and feel the emotions, which i can relate to. Really almost seemed like there were only two big breaths to get this out, which is alright cause it reads well as kind of a rant.
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Old 11-09-2010, 04:48 PM   #5
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Re: grasping a forgetfull memory

rants are my specialty lol thx
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Old 11-10-2010, 01:55 PM   #6
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Re: grasping a forgetfull memory

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such a sweet but wasted taste of a complete moment
as in the end i was the same as what came before the beginning
I especially love this bit- perfectly put, and it flows beautifully.
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