Shax

I am an empty well
if I were ever a well at all
dark
cracked soil
filled with pale echos and listless coins
wishes cast into my void

I am forgotten
built of dry earth
and distant glory
if ever there were glory at all

Your parched lips will find no answer
move away and let me be
for I am empty
dark
and full of nothing
but myself



I am an abandoned dream
if ever I were a dream at all
light
serene suffusion
born to entice sybaritic slumber
truly an awakening in disguise

I am remembered
during moments of inebriation
and ecstasy
if ever there were ecstasy at all

Your desires will find no fulfillment
let go and forget about me
for I am blinding
light
and full of everything
but myself

lotus.

Hmmm, I might have thrown a coin or two down there. I like it.

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ObiJohnKenobi

wow.

Esurient4Truth

I'm digging this 100%.

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this.anna

One of the best I've seen on here. Great job. I'd like to see more from you.

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biff0016

This is poetry,
if ever there were poetry at all.

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Shax

Thank you. All of your positive comments are very much appreciated.

dcastillo

Knife me in hobbling I'm the one talking in my sleep again.....

maddox7777

i thought this was a really powerful piece. your style and structure are exceptional. i would love an opinion of someone like you on the couple of threads i have made.

Shax

Thank you, from the both of us.

I believe I have already posted in one of your threads, but you don't appear to visit TDN much. That's a shame. I enjoy being immersed in new thoughts and perspectives. If you are reading this, then I encourage you to return and post more of your work.

slyraje

I liked this...I also read it at a time when I was feeling pretty damn sad myself, so it had a bit of an extra impact. I dig your style.

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biff0016

I literally read this every time it's bumped and my initial statement could not be more true.

*pats shax on the back*

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LabRat404

I'm inspired to make a wishing well for a secondary source of income.


but where...

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SlippingHalo

Very nice work.

Shax

It's very satisfying to know that it spoke to someone else. Thanks.

Thanks Biff. The pat really should go to my muse though. But watch out, he has a slight problem of excessive hair growth on his back. It can scare some people.

Anywhere. Just be sure to place this sign somewhere clearly visable.

"Be careful what you wish for. The owners accept no responsibilty for loss of property, loss of limbs, loss of life, loss of teeth, loss of libido or any loss in general. We do however appreciate substantial donations if your wish should result in financial gain."


Thank you.

undertowed_tex

read it once, you subltly see it, read it twice, needle in your arm, can't help but feel it

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Pala Cósmico

Found this thanks to your wiki page (gj lotus.) and I'm glad I did.

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So it goes.

Shax

Thank you :)

whittashau

Dito. Fantastic work Shax.

DON IOTAE

lol

Great job, Shax. I'm still blown away by soul’s inventory, btw.

WOW.

*reads again, both*

NightmarexOfxFerocity

I just love this stanza. I'm not sure what it is, but whenever I read it it makes me head spin and my heart throb. There's just.... something about it. Please, keep writing.

Shax

Thanks iota. Both poems are very personal to me, and it makes me smile when others are able to take something from them as well.

Shax

EASY there Tiger :p

DON IOTAE

I'm not at a level where I can appreciate stanzas (whatever that is), but I try to take it as a whole.

;)

NightmarexOfxFerocity

Sorry, but when I first read it that line just really stood out. I can't help how I feel. ;)

DON IOTAE

don't listen to Shax. Poor thing can hardly read...

Shax

Don't apologize. I had a huge grin on my face when I said "EASY there Tiger".

When it comes to poetry and the effect words can have on one's soul, I don't think anyone can help how they feel.

I know I can't.

EDIT: Take no notice of iota. He doesn't even know what a stanza is...

DON IOTAE

I have been branded an ignorant
by the know-it-all Shax
Let me end it all now,
with a swift blow of my Ax!

STANZA

NightmarexOfxFerocity

He sort of got you there, Shax. And saying easy there tiger is awesome! I use it all the time. :D

Shax

Heads will roll for this, imo.

DON IOTAE

i know the poem sucks, but...

is that a stanza?

Shax

He had to resort to google.com, therefore I win and he loses. It's quite pathetic really.

Eaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaasy Tiger!

DON IOTAE

no i didn't.

Shax

Oh Lordy. Did you even read the google results page?

DON IOTAE

nope.

I ask again, is that a stanza?

Shax

Strictly speaking, no. It's a poem. If you were to add another verse then each verse would be a stanza.

DON IOTAE

/cuts

Shax

Quit being so emo and write another verse.

Do I lose my head or what?

DON IOTAE

I'm no good at this
writing verses, you see
...

and that's as far as i get.

:(