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Old 04-27-2003, 06:34 PM   #1
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He saw the gap again today...

All lights went off, except one. One light, like a watching eye, bathing the figure on the stage.

Tall, long and hairy. The hairs came down over his face, leaving only his eyes and mouth to see. Eyes darkest than a void of life.

Nothing great about him. Just the way he stared at nothing. And then his lips moved and whispered.

“I would just like to sell, that I wasn’t quite here yesterday” as his eyes rose and stared at the crowd, the music begun to groan.

“Well I can’t stand to stare your face.
As you have fallen out of grace.
I remember just a perfect moment.
There you were lying at my arms.
Being a victim of my kisses.
Whispering to me all your wishes...”

Something inside him hurt, as he gasped and grabbed his chest. He vacillated for a while, bending over.

The microphone met with his mouth again.

“Yet I will love to draw your face.
A simple drawing I could always gaze.
I just want to get things back together.
So we can realise and held this moment.... forever.”

Tears. Tears fell down from his eyes. His face had not changed, yet he was dying from the inside. He stood straight and resemble a marble sculpture. A fallen angel or a forgotten devil.

“Now your turning your back again.
My tears have returned like a painful rain.
I can still feel your body’s warm.
Standing right by my side.
Oh, I loved you....so....much.

“And here I am speaking my heart in pain.
Am I doing all this in vain?
If I could just hear your voice in the wind.
I could at least know you can hear.
I could at least know you care.
Cause I am still here.
I will remain dead...

Looking for your touch”

The tall guy moved his hair away from his face. The stone he was beneath himself broke away. The sadness he could not explain. Not beautiful, yet not far away.

Just a dark hair, dark eyes tall guy, standing in the way, of his own happiness.

We can almost feel his pain, as he sings it away.


(perhaps that guy is me, he sure looks like me)
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Old 04-27-2003, 07:45 PM   #2
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i liked that .. it hurt me horribly . but it was good.
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Old 04-27-2003, 11:33 PM   #3
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that was so fucking great. i can so relate to the song the guy is singing. man i wish i could fucking write that well. im sure you are in a band if not you need to be.
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Old 04-28-2003, 09:34 AM   #4
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I'm not much on the dramatic "deep and misunderstood pain" type of thing.

And I would appreciate it if you would not send me private messages as commercials for your threads. If I am meant to find them, I will do so on my own. Thank you.
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Old 04-28-2003, 06:55 PM   #5
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Its great to write to Tool songs. Euthanasia usually has really thoughtfull posts, but i think this is one of his best.
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