cool. I know it's cliche' to ryme but I feel like the last word in the last stanza should be "see" , but you want your work the way you want it , it's pretty good imo.
cool. I know it's cliche' to ryme but I feel like the last word in the last stanza should be "see" , but you want your work the way you want it , it's pretty good imo.
would you rather see the summit of Everest or reach it?
See Atlantis or reach it?
See your lover's face or reach it?
Great job, Wolfman. the 'highest high' and 'lowest low' part was my favorite due to the internal rhyming. fantastic
__________________ "You are, and shall be, set in obsidian obelisk.
Those scars, these memories, will see you through"
I disagree. He knew when he started that he wouldn't be able to see the view. He'd just be happy that he did it. And if he was disappointed when he got there, then he obviously had unrealistic expectations, so fuck him.
Everything is something to argue about.
__________________ "You are, and shall be, set in obsidian obelisk.
Those scars, these memories, will see you through"