The wind tickles the surface of a pool
As a shadow below reflects its beautiful dance
Another reminder that there is so much more to life
The wind blows just as it is supposed to
Whether we notice it or not
It dances with the trees
Kisses our skin
And
Flirts with the malleability of a vast ocean
It has an outcome
A goal we can only speculate
And
On that journey it affects everything it comes in contact with
Creating ripples on the surface of life
Written into the fabric of its existence
The wind blows in and out of our lives in perfect unison
Just as it is supposed to
Good overall. My only suggestion is with the wording. Some of the lines read choppily, though it may just be me.
Then would you argue that structure is equally as important as content? Or... is the purpose of art to be "unstructured" in a sense, as to elicit deeper contemplation? Just a thought?
Well, no. Structure is not as important as content, but a piece would inspire more from the reader if it is clear. Not so much as the topic being clear, but the wording.
__________________ "You are, and shall be, set in obsidian obelisk.
Those scars, these memories, will see you through"
Well, no. Structure is not as important as content, but a piece would inspire more from the reader if it is clear. Not so much as the topic being clear, but the wording.
Would you not agree then, that in general we all function at different levels of awareness or consciousness? And if so, would that not effect the each individuals degree of perception, or ability to comprehend said content?
