Alexandra

I feel

burning waves of pain wash through my heart

seizing my most vulnerable emotions,

and throwing them into the cold black seas.

Severed, jagged, and incomplete,

I am dissolved in the undertow

into nothing.



I try to breathe on this cold, steely-gray night

but gusts of wrath and greed freeze my lungs.

They whisper their poisons to my soul,

penetrating, digging, searching.

They have won.



I am falling

deeper and deeper into the abyss

further and further away from myself

lost in the empty spaces of my mind

running from the enigma

into the infinity

that lies beyond my reason.



I'll find it here.

where there are only questions and no answers.



I...

reign3

Yay! I've been waiting for you to post something in letters. You didn't let me down either. I enjoyed this last part the most. The whole thing is pretty good. I'd try to avoid Tool terms like Undertow(Tool terms) unless it is something you would have come up with if it wasn't a Tool song/album.

Overall I liked it. Good job.

deadwolf625

The use of the word undertow fit wonderfully, but many people who don't see that all Tool uses are 3 strings of notes played in conjunction and the English language sung think that they have claim to the words like undertow, schism, eulogy. These words are a part of the language, and the reason Tool probably chose to use them is that they are wonderfully descriptive words.

I do not mean to offend anyone, I am just pointing out that it is a word, nothing more. Now a phrase like "I know the pieces fit" would be plagarism, although it is fun to string random lyrics that have been bouncing in your head together, it is plagarism, and shouldn't really be shared with the outside world unless the writer is looking to get some nasty feedback.

__________________
This is a matter of my opinion, of course.