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Old 08-07-2009, 07:11 PM   #1
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Lazy Eyes

Peace says what the devils throw away
No way
No doubt
Shame on you. For getting me to do what you do
Like a taste of maybe a little of white wine.
THE broken MISSING picture on the back says 999.
Make it tame. It's like a shitty little finger poking our brain.
Takes me a while to rearrange what might be a little sane.
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Old 08-10-2009, 03:49 PM   #2
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Re: Lazy Eyes

*Shakes head and tries to figure this out*


Can you elaborate what this about Loosen?
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Old 08-11-2009, 07:57 AM   #3
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Re: Lazy Eyes

Loosen up, dude.

But yeah, what's this about?
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Old 08-11-2009, 10:04 AM   #4
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Re: Lazy Eyes

WHAT?!
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Old 08-11-2009, 04:57 PM   #5
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Re: Lazy Eyes

I love it. Really reads well aloud.
Not a fan of 'a little' sane. Too jarring to the meter imo.
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