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Old 06-15-2009, 11:24 AM   #1
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neurophysiology is a big word..

she bleeds distrust and reminds me of the hooker nextdoor
as my hands swell she wisphers foul nothings into my ear
nothing more than a late night lovetoy for her abuse

now to choose between her and it is difficult
i know i can trust it even when it fucks me over
shes different tho now, more mature and more crafty


maby i should just enjoy them both for what they are
either way it's all just a chemical lie created through neurophysiology
such a big word for such a simple concept
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Old 06-16-2009, 03:24 AM   #2
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Re: neurophysiology is a big word..

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This is much better.

I would suggest spell checks, even when drunk, etc.

English is not my first language, but it is my strongest.
i appreciate your insight but if i cared id be more careful
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Old 06-16-2009, 08:47 AM   #3
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Re: neurophysiology is a big word..

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Originally Posted by Mirko CroCop View Post
This is much better.

I would suggest spell checks, even when drunk, etc.
agreed
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Old 06-16-2009, 07:11 PM   #4
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Re: neurophysiology is a big word..

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A writer that doesn't care isn't worth reading.

I will make a note of that to avoid any future wastes of my time.
did i force you hand to read it and who set the rule on whats worth reading. are you singling me out for some specific reason, what did i do to set you off besides not suit your personal taste? your only posts so far have been to flame me and you have yet to make a single attempt towards adding anything beneficial to the forum community
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Old 06-20-2009, 02:03 PM   #5
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Re: neurophysiology is a big word..

He's singling you out because you created this thread. Misspellings and grammar issues aren't really a big deal to me unless they inhibit the flow of the piece. In this case I'd say they do.
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Old 06-22-2009, 04:55 AM   #6
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Re: neurophysiology is a big word..

Which part is the chemical lie?
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