03-04-2007, 06:31 AM
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They called her Red...
...like a fiery temptress tempting me, wearing hardly a thing (including the lofty redolence of sweet, musky cotton candy), dancing erotically specifically for solely me. I press my mouth to hers, though briefly, for she abruptly pulls away and dances erratically, and me, already drooling, my tongue unrolls from jaw agape. And long stilettos and pointy toes protrude the surface of my tongue, her chosen dance floor. But as to balance pain with pleasure, she soothes me, dipping luscious strawberries in chilled cream, insistent in feeding me, alleviating the masochistic tingle, taking away the bitter-sweet sting. "Mmmmmm... yummy".
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Re: They called her Red...
Interesting. Solid narrative voice, though a rather cliched one.
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03-04-2007, 11:23 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Yes, cliché indeed, but I'm specifically describing something... the question is, what am I describing? Can anybody guess..? ;)
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03-05-2007, 02:26 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
Marijuana! You are talking aboot pot, the refer: dojo, grass, sweet mary jane, puff the magic ass dragon, hippy crack, the stickiest of the icky, cjeebus, cjeeba, wild strawberries, donkey spunk, um-pencil shavings mom, tea, Buddha, ganja...
Rolled in super thin zig zags.
3 times 1 minus 1.
I put my penis in your thoughtful vagina.
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03-05-2007, 03:19 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
You are soooo motivational =)
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03-05-2007, 03:43 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
you makin' fun? Cuz when <8> jf <8> gets back, he'll tell ya i'm spots on.
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Re: They called her Red...
it's obviously about drugs because it's cryptic. everything cryptic is about drugs. i win.
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03-05-2007, 05:04 PM
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Cryptic my ass. Everything aboot women is actually about drugs, because women are brought here by the devil to destroy us. I win.
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Re: They called her Red...
wrong. i believe that you, sir, have overlooked the use of an ellipsis in the opening line. not cryptic? think again. check, and mate.
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Re: They called her Red...
ellipses do not guarantee a cryptic purpose, you know this. There is little cryptic aboot leaving out the unneccesary (see dictionary, the thing propping up your bed). It is meant to build suspicion, engage, and mostly to leave out the unnessecary.
And it is aboot pot, it screams pot, not cryptic: stilettos on tongue, dressed in barely nothing...
there is a difference between an elipsis and a suspensive pause.
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I'm having a mind blank, what is a novel called, when it is written entirely in the form of letters to and from people?
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03-05-2007, 07:00 PM
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i don't recall, but i've been joking with you, i don't know if you realize that or not.
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03-05-2007, 07:53 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
Quote:
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it's obviously about drugs because it's cryptic .
Anyone else notice a possible Contradiction of terms?
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Quote:
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i don't recall, but i've been joking with you, i don't know if you realize that or not.
I take this too seriously sometimes...
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Re: They called her Red...
Quote:
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Anyone else notice a possible Contradiction of terms?
And yes.
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03-05-2007, 09:57 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
LoL... well that was an interesting array of thoughts. I'm sorry jevons, but you're wrong in saying it's about marijuana, though I can post a lovely haiku I've written on the subject (which I think I will, now... LoL). I'll give you guys a hint though, just 'cause I want to see what more people come up with, as I think this could be interesting... but it's describing the taste of something... but what's the taste? :)
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I'm to sour to answer this... but my lovely wife thinks it's aboot a drink. So i'm going to go with Whiskey, with a chaser. (fruit punch)
A body shot off a stripper's navel?
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03-06-2007, 07:43 AM
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Oh i give up. You win, you win. Just don't tell anybody.
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03-06-2007, 08:27 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Ahhh... I'm sorry you're so sour to your lovely wife's idea, for it's not on, but then again, it's not so off, either... ;)
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03-06-2007, 08:34 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Ah yes..........the erotic artist.
Nothing inspires like the taste of love.
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03-06-2007, 09:12 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Of what taste do you think I describe, solaris minor?
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Did you get bit by a chick?
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Re: They called her Red...
It's a screwdriver. Your drink is.. no wait. A Rob Roy, they kind of smell like cotton candy.
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03-06-2007, 09:28 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Getting colder...
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03-06-2007, 09:37 AM
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Whiskey sour.
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03-06-2007, 09:39 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Ehhhhhh... (sorry excuse for buzzer sound, LoL)
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03-06-2007, 09:41 AM
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skin?
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03-06-2007, 09:44 AM
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You will be so pissed when he tells you.... so pissed.
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03-06-2007, 09:58 AM
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I don't know how to type an acronym for how hard I'm laughing...
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OMGIPMFP
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Re: They called her Red...
Nope, solaris minor, it's not skin.
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'What kind of God would allow this?
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03-06-2007, 10:06 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
A paradoxical one, one who laughs at irony, as this is apparently the last thing people would ever expect me to be describing the taste of in this manner...
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You are sick.
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03-06-2007, 04:58 PM
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Re: They called her Red...
i am so curious as to what it is now...i haven't the slightest clue after all the other guesses...
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BIG RED
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03-10-2007, 07:37 AM
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Re: They called her Red...
Wine? I'm not a big wine fan, but I understand the that there are Red wines. Maybe something from Maynard's vineyard? lol
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No, its a dog turd. I win.
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Re: They called her Red...
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Cryptic my ass. Everything aboot women is actually about drugs, because women are brought here by the devil to destroy us. I win.
ROFL!!1
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My best guess is her tongue.
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