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Old 05-30-2007, 12:35 PM   #41
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Re: You name it

I can't read French, Jevons.

I have been staying out of the P & P section because I really want to post here, but everything, and I mean everything, I have been writing has not been appropriate for all audiences, lol. So I have been keeping to myself and trying to come up with something that doesn't morph into an R rated movie theme. It's so hard being me right now. *mellowdramatic sigh* I will do better at coming back in and posting.

I really like to read your work, Jevons. It's just that sometimes it is like a knife, slicing you open, and it takes some brain power that I don't have availble to absorb it and put it in the conceptual place in my brain. You are a painter my friend. And your work is often like those pictures you have to not look at to see, blurring your vision to fully grasp the image. And so I wait for the image to form in all three dimensions. And it always does. It just takes time.
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Old 05-30-2007, 02:34 PM   #42
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it's fucking poetry, not sit around and lick Barney the Dinosaur hour.

Ball up.
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Old 05-30-2007, 08:17 PM   #43
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Get back on your horse and prepare your other cheek.
Youll find many things in life, none of it you will seek.
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Old 05-31-2007, 08:45 AM   #44
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Get back on your horse and prepare your other cheek.
Youll find many things in life, none of it you will seek.
easy tiger. I wasn't blaming you for anything, i justthought it would pull through. There will be other hits.
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Old 05-31-2007, 08:46 AM   #45
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edit: the French says ''my heart sinks into the sea.'' It's about as happy an ending as i could have hoped for.

Fuck tdn. I retire.
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Old 05-31-2007, 08:53 AM   #46
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it's fucking poetry, not sit around and lick Barney the Dinosaur hour.

Ball up.
Haha.

P.s. Well said.
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Old 05-31-2007, 08:57 AM   #47
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Fuck tdn. I retire.
You're made of better stuff than that, Jevons.
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Old 05-31-2007, 09:44 AM   #48
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Old 05-31-2007, 10:50 AM   #49
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You're made of better stuff than that, Jevons.
Perhaps. But i looked around this morning, and all i saw was shit. Pointlessness. Utter pointlessness.
Was kind of a drama queen moment, but for fuck's sake, this place is fucking insane.
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Old 05-31-2007, 11:09 AM   #50
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redundant
and, since i'm not retired just yet, WHAT IN THE FUCK IS WITH YOUR CRYPTIC LITTLE STATEMENTS LATELY??
seriously, what happened to the old you: the whiney you, the predictable you. This you is really weird.
you on DOPE boy?
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Old 05-31-2007, 11:22 AM   #51
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Reply..

I've taken some time to think in the hope that the right words would come to Me sooner or later in some form or another. I believe they have.

You are a fucking genius.
some people definitely have a talent with words...
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Old 05-31-2007, 11:55 AM   #52
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some people definitely have a talent with words...
and the world will always need those few to have testicles that are well supported.
So, in a way, i have a way with creating jobs.
Employed?
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if having testicles is required,

YES.
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Old 05-31-2007, 12:21 PM   #54
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if having testicles is required,

YES.
no no, like a support group for my testicles.

edit: more like a pedestal.
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Old 05-31-2007, 12:42 PM   #55
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lol

THIS IS NOT THE BIN, JEVONS.

Now, for some poetry...
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Old 05-31-2007, 02:22 PM   #56
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Sorry officer.

and a 1, 2, 3 4:

i got nothing. Back after dinner.

lol @ where this boat wound up.
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Old 05-31-2007, 04:05 PM   #57
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some people definitely have a talent with words...
Speaking of which.. has anyone figured out what three periods at the end of a sentence means?

I dunno...
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They say giving birth is more painfull than being kicked in the nuts. Well I dont know about you but two months after getting kicked in the nuts I dont turn around and say "hey lets have another one."
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Old 05-31-2007, 07:51 PM   #59
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They say giving birth is more painfull than being kicked in the nuts. Well I dont know about you but two months after getting kicked in the nuts I dont turn around and say "hey lets have another one."
awesome. Just awesome.

Firstey, it's an elipsis (...suspensive pause), not to be confused with ''the four dots,'' denoting an unessecary string of words.
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Old 05-31-2007, 08:13 PM   #60
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Sunset:
Artessa:

We're almost there.
I won't be him,
it,
my father's shadows, terror:
the reflection of his.

Can't remember when the fairy tales split from
whatever it is out there, here-- that place
where rhyme grows stale,
softens and festers,
spreading wings into
the stench of decay
without ever sprouting one hair;
i can remember everything since.

I don't need fairies to find infinite but
they make a lovely crest.

I don't need you to touch me,
but it helps.

I need to watch this record spin,
in so doing adorn it, wet it with a
maze:
seven gardens
hand in hand;
turn the circle to pixels, then
twist them until there is depth
(just like blossoms,
the way they must be
spit from a sleepwalking tree).

The light is always so kind to your face in pictures,
i remember you different.

...because, not in spite of...
and the captains shall sink alone,
remanded-- with us a hot whisper in their pan.

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Old 05-31-2007, 10:44 PM   #61
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Sunset:
Artessa:

We're almost there.
I won't be him,
it,
my father's shadows, terror:
the reflection of his.

Can't remember when the fairy tales split from
whatever it is out there, here-- that place
where rhyme grows stale,
softens and festers,
spreading wings into
the stench of decay
without ever sprouting one hair;
i can remember everything since.

I don't need fairies to find infinite but
they make a lovely crest.

I don't need you to touch me,
but it helps.

I need to watch this record spin,
in so doing adorn it, wet it with a
maze:
seven gardens
hand in hand;
turn the circle to pixels, then
twist them until there is depth
(just like blossoms,
the way they must be
spit from a sleepwalking tree).

The light is always so kind to your face in pictures,
i remember you different.

...because, not in spite of...
and the captains shall sink alone,
remanded-- with us a hot whisper in their pan.

That is fucking fantastic.
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Old 06-01-2007, 07:36 AM   #62
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and, since i'm not retired just yet, WHAT IN THE FUCK IS WITH YOUR CRYPTIC LITTLE STATEMENTS LATELY??
seriously, what happened to the old you: the whiney you, the predictable you. This you is really weird.
you on DOPE boy?
hehe ill let you guess for a while;) and no not dope just some yopo
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hehe ill let you guess for a while;) and no not dope just some yopo
You're like the guy in audience of a Bill Hicks Show yelling out 'Freebird'.

Or are you..?
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Old 06-01-2007, 05:26 PM   #64
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You're like the guy in audience of a Bill Hicks Show yelling out 'Freebird'.

Or are you..?
no. i just followed the instructions and he got confused?
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Old 06-04-2007, 07:06 AM   #65
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I've had a song in my head for almost a year and a half. Just six minutes of awesome guitar from my guitar player. You wouldn't believe how many versions of lyrics i have for it-- they all suck.
But now i think i have it, and it's a neat feeling. Like climbing a massive breast, finding the nipple, pulling out a tap, and doing what has to be done.
Feed the children.
Feed the world.
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Old 06-04-2007, 08:49 AM   #66
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I am going to tell you how i feel right now.
Tell me what you think of me.
Tell me how i'm doing.

I feel like a strip of negative falling to or through the dark cutting room floor. Whole parts of what i once was lie around me, this makes it a shame i have no eye for such things.
Absent of the first frames, wondering how long this goes,
has gone.
Silly questions.
If someone were to come in, flick on the lights and resume work, all this information would be lost.
I'd be stripped.
We'd have to make another negative, fill it and clip it.
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Old 06-04-2007, 08:59 AM   #67
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I think that no part of you should be cut out. You are jagged enough as it is. Your writting reflects a side (not all) of you that the world need to see. You display clarity through the use of illusion and mirrors, diverting the eyes from the perception to reality. At least your reality. Which is closer to truth than mine.
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Old 06-04-2007, 09:42 AM   #68
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i was thinking about infinity and how it relates to film through the idea of (intentionally? Purposefully?) not knowing the scape of our past, not ''cutting'' myself.
i'm not saying i'm into that sort of thing, i was just thinking about the thing.
But thanks.
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Old 06-04-2007, 10:06 AM   #69
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I was looking at it more in terms of editing. You mentioned that if someone comes into the room and turned on the light and started working you would have to start over again. I took that to mean editing out so much that there is no longer enough to keep the storyline flowing. Time to reshoot. More experience to put on the table, to dredge up. Thats what I thought. But I am weird.
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Old 06-04-2007, 12:37 PM   #70
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you thought well. I was just being a dick.
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Old 06-04-2007, 03:26 PM   #71
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Sometimes i thought i'd cut your eyes
just to see the look in them.
Careful,
with those words,
they hide an axe.

If i loved what you gave me,
isn't that the same thing?

Who needs to know?
Who needs to know?
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Dear God:
Give Me everything I need to live.
Give Me everything I want to have.
Give Me the Life that I want.

(...)

Dear God:
You've given Me everything I've needed to suspend change in this dream.
You've given Me every Material I asked for, they are without value.
You've given Me the life that I wanted.

Dear God:
May I die soon?
Not by My will, of course.
I want to see what's on the other side.

(...)

Dear God:
Could you please disreguard Me. My Thoughts. My Prayers..?
I am dillusional.
I am no longer tired.
I am done sleeping now, Father.
I want to go Home.
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Well fuck.. somebody did say that [they want] poetry, right?

Dont make Me scroll up! (too lazy.)
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Old 06-04-2007, 05:18 PM   #74
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i think suicide is a revocation of rights, as well.
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Oh, well.. that "poem" is just a 30 second masterpiece.

Wait until You see the real fuckin thing.
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you spelled masturbate wrong.

*forgives*

edit: don't be so hostile, *puff* it's poetry, maan.
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lol..

oops, Its all good.
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this is poetry, quit fucking around and think something!!!
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One time I climbed a tree, and while standing on the furthest branch from the ground that would still support my weight I thought: would it be more decorative with a rope swinging like holiday tinsel or a fresh coat of "paint" on the trunk?


I never did make up my mind.
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We used to be monkies.
So, how did we become so stupid.
And when did we become so blind.
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