The Tool Page: Opinion - the exquisite cadaver

11-06-2006, 07:35 PM	#1
~~DON IOTAE~~ Banned. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 7,004 Bincount™: 13310	the exquisite cadaver bear with me here. theres a thing called "el cadaver exquisito"... the exquisite cadaver, if you will. it's a game where different people write one phrase. One person after the other. In the end, somebody reads the resulting poem. Sometimes it makes sense, sometimes it doesn't. So, since I'm so godamn uninspired to write any poetry of my own, I'm gonna start an "exquisite cadaver" here. Please, don't post your opinions about the whole issue, just post a poetic phrase by YOU. Let's see what comes out in the end... speaking of which: the end approaches, and my days grow heavy...
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11-06-2006, 07:45 PM	#2
biff0016 don't knock it 'til u try it Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: midwest Posts: 1,737 Bincount™: 3430	Re: the exquisite cadaver expose my weaknesses, these tears are immutable. __________________ rip Chad McDaniel (USAC) rip Scott Kalitta (NHRA) rip Henry Surtees (F2) rip Neal Parker (NHRA)
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11-06-2006, 09:02 PM	#3
MU152762 Level 4 - Thinker Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: In my head Posts: 28 Bincount™: 0	Re: the exquisite cadaver Quetzalcoatl's return fearful yet happy, so inevitable
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11-08-2006, 08:55 PM	#4
~~yossaricat~~ Suicide Booth ID: 1 Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: mamihlapinatapai Posts: 5,096 Bincount™: 16707	Re: the exquisite cadaver the junebugs were creeping up her sleeve.
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11-09-2006, 06:41 AM	#5
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver and the lonely spider was left to weave
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11-09-2006, 09:29 AM	#6
Kruppo Level 9 - Obstreperous Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Fuck if I know. Posts: 1,517 Bincount™: 2840	Re: the exquisite cadaver This one last web that will soon be forgotten __________________ I'm so post-rock I shit sad birds
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11-09-2006, 02:05 PM	#7
the_shrike29 Level 5 - Deep Thinker Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Minneapolis Posts: 94 Bincount™: 0	Re: the exquisite cadaver fibrous inviting as frozen pond shimmers farewell __________________ 8.13.01 LA \| 9.6.01 St. Paul \| 10.20.01 Cedar Rapids 9.6.02 Ames \| 5.12.06 Minneapolis \| 9.16.06 Minneapolis \| 6.20.07 Peoria \| 6.26.07 St. Paul \| 7.1.10 St. Paul \| 6.23.12 St. Paul \|
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11-11-2006, 07:03 AM	#8
Kruppo Level 9 - Obstreperous Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Fuck if I know. Posts: 1,517 Bincount™: 2840	Re: the exquisite cadaver And the season is embraced by desolation __________________ I'm so post-rock I shit sad birds
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11-13-2006, 10:21 PM	#9
deppo Level 7 - Loquacious Join Date: May 2006 Location: Underside of Earth Posts: 492 Bincount™: 20	Re: the exquisite cadaver Grey, bleak and all enveloping __________________ -> -> --> ---> -----> --------> -------------> --------------------->
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11-14-2006, 11:51 PM	#10
~~yossaricat~~ Suicide Booth ID: 1 Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: mamihlapinatapai Posts: 5,096 Bincount™: 16707	Re: the exquisite cadaver like a warm blanket.
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11-15-2006, 10:12 AM	#11
mike009 Level 4 - Thinker Join Date: May 2006 Location: nj Posts: 46 Bincount™: 0	Re: the exquisite cadaver a blanket made of thorns, slicing our skin so the desolation can drip out, a tourniquet of loss.
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11-16-2006, 11:09 AM	#12
lizbiz Level 6 - Very Deep Thinker Join Date: May 2006 Location: Niagara Falls Posts: 176 Bincount™: 1	Re: the exquisite cadaver the more pain, the less imaginable
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11-17-2006, 01:45 AM	#13
~~resonance.~~ amateur alchemist Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: the palace Posts: 2,471 Bincount™: 3472	Re: the exquisite cadaver this is in you, it's beyond your control
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11-17-2006, 09:29 AM	#14
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver if you ever had any control to begin with
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11-17-2006, 09:58 AM	#15
~~DON IOTAE~~ Banned. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 7,004 Bincount™: 13310	Re: the exquisite cadaver the end draws near, i forget and remember
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11-17-2006, 10:24 AM	#16
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver i give and i take
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11-20-2006, 09:05 AM	#17
~~DON IOTAE~~ Banned. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 7,004 Bincount™: 13310	Re: the exquisite cadaver Here it is, ladies and gents. TDN's own exquisite cadaver. I think it turned out pretty well! Enjoy. the end approaches, and my days grow heavy... expose my weaknesses, these tears are immutable. Quetzalcoatl's return fearful yet happy, so inevitable the junebugs were creeping up her sleeve. and the lonely spider was left to weave This one last web that will soon be forgotten fibrous inviting as frozen pond shimmers farewell And the season is embraced by desolation Grey, bleak and all enveloping like a warm blanket. a blanket made of thorns, slicing our skin so the desolation can drip out, a tourniquet of loss. the more pain, the less imaginable this is in you, it's beyond your control if you ever had any control to begin with the end draws near, i forget and remember i give and i take
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11-21-2006, 06:16 AM	#18
~~DON IOTAE~~ Banned. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 7,004 Bincount™: 13310	Re: the exquisite cadaver *******************COMMENT SPACE******************* insert your comments here. mine: i like it. i know shit about poetry, but i read it, and i feel something. I like it.
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11-21-2006, 06:38 AM	#19
unto her a vineyard Level 10 - Vehement Suicide Booth ID: 5 Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: McRonalds Posts: 3,552 Bincount™: 9166	Re: the exquisite cadaver yeah thats cool very dada... start it again
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11-21-2006, 08:25 AM	#20
lotus. Up From The Skies Suicide Booth ID: 13 Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Stardust Posts: 13,137 Bincount™: 26323	Re: the exquisite cadaver i like how that turned out. __________________ I don't know where the sunbeams end And the starlights begin It's all a mystery
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11-21-2006, 09:01 AM	#21
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver not too shabby... now interpret it.
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11-21-2006, 09:10 AM	#22
~~DON IOTAE~~ Banned. Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 7,004 Bincount™: 13310	Re: the exquisite cadaver r u supposed to do that with poetry? isnt it just about feeling it?
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11-22-2006, 11:38 AM

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Re: the exquisite cadaver

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Originally Posted by unto her a vineyard

start it again

allow me, if that's not too forward (here's the first line of one of my recent works):

idealism sours in the mouth as the eyes embrace reality

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11-22-2006, 02:17 PM	#24
Inbred Fred Ne'er a Grievance Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: ______/\__ Posts: 431 Bincount™: 4432	Re: the exquisite cadaver the emptiness of collapse and contradiction beckon from obilivion
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11-22-2006, 03:44 PM	#25
the_shrike29 Level 5 - Deep Thinker Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Minneapolis Posts: 94 Bincount™: 0	Re: the exquisite cadaver rememberance of promised glass epiphany and glacial mirrors __________________ 8.13.01 LA \| 9.6.01 St. Paul \| 10.20.01 Cedar Rapids 9.6.02 Ames \| 5.12.06 Minneapolis \| 9.16.06 Minneapolis \| 6.20.07 Peoria \| 6.26.07 St. Paul \| 7.1.10 St. Paul \| 6.23.12 St. Paul \|
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11-22-2006, 11:08 PM	#26
jack's ennui Level 7 - Loquacious Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: emerald city. Posts: 225 Bincount™: 4	Re: the exquisite cadaver these mirrors reflect a perfect image, that shatters, falling on me __________________ nice pumas asshole.
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11-23-2006, 06:49 AM	#27
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver in a stupid trance of self-absorption
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11-23-2006, 10:48 PM	#28
lotus. Up From The Skies Suicide Booth ID: 13 Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Stardust Posts: 13,137 Bincount™: 26323	Re: the exquisite cadaver fragmented, i can now see all the parts of me __________________ I don't know where the sunbeams end And the starlights begin It's all a mystery
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11-24-2006, 12:18 PM	#29
opiated Level 7 - Loquacious Join Date: May 2006 Location: --- Posts: 242 Bincount™: 145	Re: the exquisite cadaver Slipping down the spine of mystery __________________ Veiled and shadowy, you attack me too; Now at your whim I bare my back Under your assault.
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11-25-2006, 05:10 PM	#30
~~yossaricat~~ Suicide Booth ID: 1 Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: mamihlapinatapai Posts: 5,096 Bincount™: 16707	Re: the exquisite cadaver into an abyss of understanding.
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11-25-2006, 06:02 PM	#31
biff0016 don't knock it 'til u try it Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: midwest Posts: 1,737 Bincount™: 3430	Re: the exquisite cadaver The air here is almost tangible, heavy with despair. __________________ rip Chad McDaniel (USAC) rip Scott Kalitta (NHRA) rip Henry Surtees (F2) rip Neal Parker (NHRA)
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11-25-2006, 10:10 PM	#32
~~John Doggett~~ Banned. Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: tents Posts: 1,821 Bincount™: 415	Re: the exquisite cadaver gimmie some corndogs
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11-25-2006, 10:55 PM	#33
~~ObiJohnKenobi~~ Banned. Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Swimming towards rocky shores Posts: 920 Bincount™: 3532	Re: the exquisite cadaver and a half ounce of weed
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11-26-2006, 02:45 AM	#34
~~yossaricat~~ Suicide Booth ID: 1 Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: mamihlapinatapai Posts: 5,096 Bincount™: 16707	Re: the exquisite cadaver busted frialators and dead heads have broken my dreams
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11-26-2006, 10:03 AM	#35
biff0016 don't knock it 'til u try it Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: midwest Posts: 1,737 Bincount™: 3430	Re: the exquisite cadaver when one deviates from the "cadaver" it lay in utter ruins. __________________ rip Chad McDaniel (USAC) rip Scott Kalitta (NHRA) rip Henry Surtees (F2) rip Neal Parker (NHRA)
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11-26-2006, 10:19 AM	#36
x7 Lateralus 7x Level 9 - Obstreperous Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: earth Posts: 1,560 Bincount™: 1142	Re: the exquisite cadaver The only truth I know- seven years of hex upon my floor, __________________ Rotten Peaches
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11-26-2006, 07:54 PM	#37
lotus. Up From The Skies Suicide Booth ID: 13 Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Stardust Posts: 13,137 Bincount™: 26323	Re: the exquisite cadaver clouds that hover, stare at your mind __________________ I don't know where the sunbeams end And the starlights begin It's all a mystery
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11-27-2006, 12:46 PM	#38
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11-27-2006, 12:52 PM	#39
~~pork chops~~ Banned. Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: the space shuttle endeavourererer Posts: 2,118 Bincount™: 10891	Re: the exquisite cadaver it penetrates my mind like cold shards of glass unwavering in it's influence.
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11-29-2006, 06:29 PM	#40
frapgurl Level 5 - Deep Thinker Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Altoona, PA Posts: 55 Bincount™: 0	Re: the exquisite cadaver communication stifled, it renders me mute __________________ Cold silence has a tendency to atrophy any sense of compassion
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