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Old 10-30-2007, 06:21 AM   #41
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Re: A Sad Man
As far as I know, a stanza forms a division of a poem.

But hey, don't quote me on that.
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Old 10-30-2007, 09:06 AM   #42
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roggs can you edit that post?and try not use that fuckers name, this thread presents everything poetry is supposed to be about...and somehow i cant see how his name fits in here. it just looks like a big stain that needs to be removed. plzy. an early christmas present for me...
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Old 10-30-2007, 09:20 AM   #43
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roggs can you edit that post?and try not use that fuckers name, this thread presents everything poetry is supposed to be about...and somehow i cant see how his name fits in here. it just looks like a big stain that needs to be removed. plzy. an early christmas present for me...
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Old 10-30-2007, 10:10 AM   #44
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merci beaucoup.

but...it still bothers me.

i know i just asked for a name edit...but could you edit the whole post? and write sth about this poem...or the weather outside...or how much you love your wife and your kids or sth. plzy...an early birthday present...
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Old 10-30-2007, 01:59 PM   #45
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One good thing to come of theivery, I rarely come here and did today. I am glad I did, this poem is beautiful Shax.
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Old 10-30-2007, 11:40 PM   #46
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oh wow, per request


blue
the color of clear summer sky
on the day we pledged to each other
beautiful she was as she has always been
my light, my grace, my love
together we will be
forever and beyond

blue
the colour of your bright eyes
you are our first
our little girl, growing and exploring quick
a feeling I never could have dreamt of
but you sparkled it in me
my precious daughter

blue
the color of clear summer sky
on the day you where born
our little man, growing and exploring quick
the feeling I never could have dreamt of
sparkled on and on and on
my precious son



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jeez, I'm a bad poet
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awwww...c'est magnifique...brilliant Roggs.

thank you very much, best early birthday present ever:)
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Old 10-31-2007, 10:51 AM   #47
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Wow. Some hardcore editing took place here, lol.

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One good thing to come of theivery, I rarely come here and did today. I am glad I did, this poem is beautiful Shax.
Thank you Noelle.
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Old 11-01-2007, 04:53 AM   #48
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Let's get this thread back on track.

Where is iota?

He owes me a stanza.....
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Old 11-01-2007, 06:11 AM   #49
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Where is iota?
check out his ct. iota is probed :( click on his avy and find a thread named "myspace is officialy lame" and you'll see the retarded reason why he got probed. but hey... at least now he has enough time to write you a proper stanza.

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Old 11-01-2007, 06:49 AM   #50
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I read it. I'm not impressed. Is that the ONLY reason he was punished?

I have read many ACTUAL offensive posts on this site, none of which resulted in a probation.
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Old 11-01-2007, 07:09 AM   #51
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I read it. I'm not impressed. Is that the ONLY reason he was punished?

I have read many ACTUAL offensive posts on this site, none of which resulted in a probation.
the ONLY. as i said: retarded.
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Shax, this peice makes me feel great. "Truly an awakening in disguise" .............can't find words.......ugh.........nevermind
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Seems too much to comprehend
I'm not fit for this place
Why should I stay here at my end?
I can't reveal my face

Trying to find balance
in a millisecond mind
in a carnival of trades
I hear we're running out of time

I feel paralyzed
A weight tied to my brain
I lost the fire in my eyes
Now I sleep away my days


twas a sad man I knew
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Old 11-01-2007, 07:29 AM   #54
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W.I.B. = alias, imo.
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Old 11-01-2007, 07:41 AM   #55
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Seems too much to comprehend
I'm not fit for this place
Why should I stay here at my end?
I can't reveal my face

Trying to find balance
in a millisecond mind
in a carnival of trades
I hear we're running out of time

I feel paralyzed
A weight tied to my brain
I lost the fire in my eyes
Now I sleep away my days


twas a sad man I knew

The Sad Man is the one that makes me tick.
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Old 11-01-2007, 10:04 PM   #56
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W.I.B. = alias, imo.
okay, now I connected some dots. I just read the rules for the first time and now I know what alias means here. I can't tell you where my imagination was taken this afternoon. I feel I am more prepared for a day that has yet to come. I was thinking alias=great....wowee they like me, we're on the same side. But now I understand your clever language schemes. This was a setup, and it worked out beautifully for I have a new friend. Does TheGodStar befriend wolves of men? If so, I made two in one rotation and this is history. If not, this controversy could last as long as this dream. Decisions, decisions....
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Old 11-02-2007, 06:32 AM   #57
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Old 11-02-2007, 07:08 AM   #58
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If so, I made two in one rotation and this is history. If not, this controversy could last as long as this dream. Decisions, decisions....
Who is the second, Wolfman?
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Old 11-02-2007, 09:55 AM   #59
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Star and Percy, ya'll are nice
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Old 11-02-2007, 10:14 AM   #60
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I feel paralyzed
A weight tied to my brain
I lost the fire in my eyes
Now I sleep away my days

Howling in shadows
Living in a lunar spell

Those that the beast is looking for
Listen in awe and you'll hear him

Bark at the moon

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Old 11-04-2007, 05:16 AM   #61
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But it doesn't follow from the first part in the thread. Make it work.
dang you are one dame that's hard to please...

*back to work*
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Old 11-05-2007, 10:38 AM   #62
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One time
when I was out of my mind
I had all the answers
a quiet triumph walking by
no time but mine

It was for the world
but I couldn't rest
my friends held their tongues
I practiced invisibility
I knew they were talking somewhere
I fucked it off
for I was striving string-free
it was a subtle tragedy....

I cared so much
Why can't they translate?
Read a foot deeper my friends
I won't come up for air
for your sake
so you can see as I see
Everything

A fragile ancient mind
detached for safety
I reached the peak, then
it shattered so suddenly.

It wasn't up to me
no design of mine is greater
I couldn't wait to be the one
I broke under the weight
unidentifiable by most

I found my center
and learned to feel It
Mr. Manic Man took his own life
thankfully
may he inspire
from the pits of hell
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Old 11-05-2007, 10:54 AM   #63
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Old 11-05-2007, 11:30 AM   #64
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and now,
the only thing left
while i lay down is
to bid you all adieu
looking at the frown
upon my face
for having challenged
the great Shax
I shall never do it again!
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Old 11-06-2007, 08:57 AM   #65
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a flattering grimace
followed by a flutter of fear
theres no need to worry
just shift gears
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Old 11-19-2007, 07:13 AM   #66
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Your parched lips will find no answer
move away and let me be
for I am empty
dark
and full of nothing
but myself

Your desires will find no fulfillment
let go and forget about me
for I am blinding
light
and full of everything
but myself
I am sensing the split again, and it makes me sad.
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Old 11-19-2007, 08:34 PM   #67
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Don't be sad.

It's done now.
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Old 11-20-2007, 05:24 PM   #68
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it's getting warm in here
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Old 11-21-2007, 08:09 AM   #70
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it's getting warm in here

Thats what happens when you are exposed to a strange light.
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Old 11-26-2007, 07:31 AM   #72
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Thats what happens when you are exposed to a strange light.
Quit being distracted by lights.

Swordfight?
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Old 11-26-2007, 11:03 AM   #74
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*wields butterfly swords*

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Look, your shoe is untied!
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Old 11-26-2007, 11:30 AM   #76
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Nice try.

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Old 11-27-2007, 01:09 PM   #79
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He won't have seen that coming.

Plunkered most likely.
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Old 11-27-2007, 01:10 PM   #80
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Shax don't second guess yourself...I'm diggin what you wrote
Where did I second guess myself?
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