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Old 08-22-2013, 12:03 PM   #1
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Slight of Hand

An indifferent stretching open, gentle
An immense yawning motion, eternal
A driving entropic expansion, unyielding
A classical pirouette of particles, harmonious
A swift oscillation of energy, immaculate
A ouroboric embodiment of consciousness, refreshed
An unbroken rhythm of Birth and Death, temporal
A vexatious yearning for saturated bliss, heavy
A monsoon of unwavering patience, calculated
A striding lineage of perseverance, absolute
A ticking potential, unleashed
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Old 08-23-2013, 10:11 AM   #2
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Re: Slight of Hand

This is very good. All of it leads nicely to, " A ticking potential, unleashed."

It reads like a birth. The birth of something good.
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Old 08-23-2013, 08:07 PM   #3
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Re: Slight of Hand

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This is very good. All of it leads nicely to, " A ticking potential, unleashed."

It reads like a birth. The birth of something good.
thanks gonz
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