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Old 03-28-2008, 07:41 AM   #81
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ephemeral
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Old 03-28-2008, 07:55 AM   #82
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garblings of these memories.
they have no power.
they are the putrefaction of tomorrow,
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Old 03-29-2008, 01:42 AM   #83
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forecasting Sun
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Old 03-29-2008, 09:21 AM   #84
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yet, the compages obscure it
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Old 03-29-2008, 11:11 AM   #85
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If only my solvent hadn't rinsed from my pockets...
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Old 03-30-2008, 05:15 PM   #86
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the pages wiped clean with the piss of angels
smudged with archaeopteryne feathers
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Old 03-30-2008, 10:24 PM   #87
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Old 03-31-2008, 10:17 AM   #88
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Bump.
Time and place to say goodbye, to walk away and turn the eye
To live is to learn, so they say
Always remember but live for today
For sorrows-past may still ache when it rains
and certian syllables can halt any attempt at being brave
Before speech, I was amused endlessly by my hands.
my spine stands, my mind falls
Nothing more meaningful than a kick in the balls
Wet yesterday's have no grip, save for what swells around synaptic joints, freezes
ephemeral
garblings of these memories.
they have no power.
they are the putrefaction of tomorrow,
forecasting Sun
yet, the compages obscure it
If only my solvent hadn't rinsed from my pockets...
the pages wiped clean with the piss of angels
smudged with archaeopteryne feathers

MY



GOD

I thought that was a good spot to wrap it up. I also felt it was pertinent to include the first "bump" line. What do you guys think?
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Old 03-31-2008, 02:23 PM   #89
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As it turns out, this is as good, if not better than most of what is written here.

Nice job, Taxi.
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Old 03-31-2008, 03:13 PM   #90
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Right back atcha, Moloch.
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Old 04-01-2008, 08:58 AM   #91
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well i'm just happy to have squeaked in on it. it has a degree of cohesion that's, that's kind of scary, all things considered. the images move around, drag you here or there, but retain this chronological, even centrifical style. Jayar's "sorrows -past may still ache when it rains" got this liquid motif tangent going, eventually ending with "angels' piss"...
i don't know, shit, a right fucking success.

edit: someone sticky this bitch, for fucking please?
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Old 04-03-2008, 07:15 AM   #92
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May as well keep this shit moving
Beat it bloody and bruising.
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Old 04-09-2008, 04:24 PM   #93
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Red-starved meat and larvae blooming
The Earth, the hearse; the sky, its jewel.
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Old 04-14-2008, 08:52 AM   #94
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and for all it's worth, here's one more line
cross the bridge and pay the fine
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Old 08-12-2008, 07:13 PM   #95
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injustice cracks under the feather's pressure
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Old 08-12-2008, 11:12 PM   #96
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give way to a towering ginko below
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Old 08-18-2008, 11:37 AM   #97
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earth and sky bisected,
inscribing a final arc on all tomorrows
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Old 06-03-2009, 07:25 PM   #98
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Let's do this again seeing as we all seem to be so dead

I'll start, follow along if you feel like it


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Old 06-04-2009, 02:53 PM   #99
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Swallowed by silence theres no better tune
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Old 06-16-2009, 07:57 PM   #100
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Ruled by movement, referee'd by constraint
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Realizing consistency only matters to the inconsistent
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Old 06-16-2009, 08:29 PM   #102
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Old 09-06-2009, 10:33 AM   #103
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the coal fire burns best when left without sunlight's breath
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Old 09-07-2009, 04:59 PM   #104
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uhh, you guys miss the new one?
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Old 09-07-2009, 06:12 PM   #105
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holla entraped by deep blue
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Old 09-07-2009, 08:05 PM   #106
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what shit is this, and why's it on you?
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Old 09-08-2009, 12:31 PM   #107
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