I am your guardian angel. I am your angel of death.
I hide you from the ones that hurt you as I
Take away your breath.
I am the tear shining in your eye
I am the one that begs you not to cry
I am the one that would die for you
I place the dagger right beside you
I am the one that tears your spirit open
I give your soul the strength to run
I am the one that gives you agony
I am the one that craves your blood
Never underestimate me
I would bleed to give you love.
this really isnt my best writing...i need a title tho
It kind of irks me when a poem starts off rhyming, and then when it ends, the rhyme has been gone. I think it would sound better/flow better if it were one way or the other. I thought the rhyming was working okay. Maybe do some editing and see what you come up with.
A title that came to mind, for whatever reason, is "Sacrafice Myself". -shrugs-.
Good job.:)
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I like it. like EyesOAFA said it is a bit funny that it starts rhyming then stops but I guess that happens- you cant sacrifice the meaning and truth of a poem for the sound and structure though in my opinion if you know what I mean. Yo could Just call it "I am"- works on at least two levels.;)
