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Old 09-19-2006, 07:43 PM   #1
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Please just tell me you sank on purpose
Tell me it was because you were nervous
When the water came you just couldnít bear it
You had to purge yourself clean of your surrounding
You had to sink and become nothing
Please tell me youíre the one
The only one who could have tied on the weight
Leave no suspicion of me being the reason
At the shore
You stood next to your reflection
It overtook you with envy
As it has me
Jealousy has captivated me
You sunk into me
And now Iíve saw where youíve been
You filled me with you
Now I know where you are
Youíve been in another body
But now youíve no where to hide
Except your new found water
Put in your place
Youíre the victim
Drowning in what is
No compliment
You havenít earned it quite yet
Constantly abolished from certainty
Polished to fit into this memory
The lung fills with water
I canít hear you
Youíre under there for a reason
You talked with passion and courage
You stood up to me with truth and reason
Something I canít understand
Something Iíve never known
Just donít
Worse and worse
Tighter and tighter
The fight gets harder and harder
Itís the perfect ending
A life of struggling
Saved for the last few breaths
Just breathe in the water
Breathe, breathe, breathe, and breathe.
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Old 09-21-2006, 05:11 PM   #2
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Re: Evaporate

It could use a few tweaks to it, but for the most part I liked it.
I reject your reality, and substitute my own.
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Old 09-22-2006, 06:20 PM   #3
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Re: Evaporate

Why dont you talk to him/her? If they are anthing like me i am sure they are just as eager to understand why.
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Old 09-23-2006, 07:33 AM   #4
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Re: Evaporate

It's hard to hear someone talk when you won't even listen like you leave the room long before you get to move. I'm saying that they are right or you are either but it looks like its far gone up to you to tell if it's too far gone
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