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Old 05-30-2007, 05:22 PM   #1
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The Gulf of Tonkin

Blind hands touched this wall of brail,
Reading a vision written as a tale.
No words of mine could've shown him what was there,
in this museum one must stare, instead he shared.

He shared his words of blind wisdom,
Telling stories as empty as the reason.
No picture of anything rested in his mind,
nor did love or deceit or a regretful time.

Though he cannot tell a seed from a child,
cannot tell the tamed from the wild.
He continued to share, though his words did not speak,
Never did they whisper, nor did they scream.

His words marked pain, forced his void so naked,
so wide and infinite, as dark as his own perspective.

As I guided away this God, of a wisdom, of a sorrow,
He felt my face with a hand, smiled, and said:
"My words will be yours tomarrow."
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Old 05-30-2007, 08:22 PM   #2
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Re: The Gulf of Tonkin

That was excellent I especially liked those last two lines.
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Old 05-30-2007, 08:25 PM   #3
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Re: The Gulf of Tonkin

Is this really intended for a deity? Regardless it flows nicely and despite my lack of faith, it spoke.
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Old 05-30-2007, 08:44 PM   #4
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Re: The Gulf of Tonkin

Hi biff,

Nah it wasn't for a deity, when I called him God it was an exaggeration, or at least I intended this. If you're a history nerd, the Gulf of Tonkin was a battle scene in the vietnam war. I went to a NY museum called... nvm lol(damn my memory), it was about... a year 1/2 ago? It was only a 1 day stay but I was fortunete to meet a veteran :D, he had this maynard-like smart ass attitude towards everything, it was fun hanging with the old geezer.
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Old 05-31-2007, 12:32 PM   #5
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Re: The Gulf of Tonkin

i happen to be a history "nerd" which initiated my interest in this peice. Its nice to reread it knowing your inspiration for writing it.
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