11-06-2006, 07:35 PM
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the exquisite cadaver
bear with me here.
theres a thing called "el cadaver exquisito"... the exquisite cadaver, if you will. it's a game where different people write one phrase. One person after the other. In the end, somebody reads the resulting poem. Sometimes it makes sense, sometimes it doesn't.
So, since I'm so godamn uninspired to write any poetry of my own, I'm gonna start an "exquisite cadaver" here. Please, don't post your opinions about the whole issue, just post a poetic phrase by YOU. Let's see what comes out in the end... speaking of which:
the end approaches, and my days grow heavy...
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11-06-2006, 07:45 PM
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expose my weaknesses, these tears are immutable.
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11-06-2006, 09:02 PM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
Quetzalcoatl's return fearful yet happy, so inevitable
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11-08-2006, 08:55 PM
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the junebugs were creeping up her sleeve.
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11-09-2006, 06:41 AM
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and the lonely spider was left to weave
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11-09-2006, 09:29 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
This one last web that will soon be forgotten
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11-09-2006, 02:05 PM
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fibrous inviting as frozen pond shimmers farewell
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11-11-2006, 07:03 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
And the season is embraced by desolation
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11-13-2006, 10:21 PM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
Grey, bleak and all enveloping
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11-14-2006, 11:51 PM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
like a warm blanket.
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11-15-2006, 10:12 AM
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a blanket made of thorns, slicing our skin so the desolation can drip out, a tourniquet of loss.
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11-16-2006, 11:09 AM
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the more pain, the less imaginable
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11-17-2006, 01:45 AM
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this is in you, it's beyond your control
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11-17-2006, 09:29 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
if you ever had any control to begin with
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11-17-2006, 09:58 AM
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the end draws near, i forget and remember
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11-17-2006, 10:24 AM
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i give and i take
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11-20-2006, 09:05 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
Here it is, ladies and gents. TDN's own exquisite cadaver. I think it turned out pretty well! Enjoy.
the end approaches, and my days grow heavy...
expose my weaknesses, these tears are immutable.
Quetzalcoatl's return fearful yet happy, so inevitable
the junebugs were creeping up her sleeve.
and the lonely spider was left to weave
This one last web that will soon be forgotten
fibrous inviting as frozen pond shimmers farewell
And the season is embraced by desolation
Grey, bleak and all enveloping
like a warm blanket.
a blanket made of thorns, slicing our skin so the desolation can drip out, a tourniquet of loss.
the more pain, the less imaginable
this is in you, it's beyond your control
if you ever had any control to begin with
the end draws near, i forget and remember
i give and i take
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11-21-2006, 06:16 AM
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*********************COMMENT SPACE*********************
insert your comments here.
mine: i like it. i know shit about poetry, but i read it, and i feel something. I like it.
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11-21-2006, 06:38 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
yeah thats cool very dada...
start it again
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11-21-2006, 08:25 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
i like how that turned out.
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11-21-2006, 09:01 AM
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not too shabby... now interpret it.
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11-21-2006, 09:10 AM
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r u supposed to do that with poetry? isnt it just about feeling it?
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11-22-2006, 11:38 AM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
Quote:
Originally Posted by
unto her a vineyard
start it again
allow me, if that's not too forward (here's the first line of one of my recent works):
idealism sours in the mouth as the eyes embrace reality
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11-22-2006, 02:17 PM
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Re: the exquisite cadaver
the emptiness of collapse and contradiction beckon from obilivion
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11-22-2006, 03:44 PM
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rememberance of promised glass epiphany and glacial mirrors
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11-22-2006, 11:08 PM
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these mirrors reflect a perfect image, that shatters, falling on me
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11-23-2006, 06:49 AM
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in a stupid trance of self-absorption
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fragmented, i can now see all the parts of me
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11-24-2006, 12:18 PM
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Slipping down the spine of mystery
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into an abyss of understanding.
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The air here is almost tangible, heavy with despair.
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gimmie some corndogs
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and a half ounce of weed
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busted frialators and dead heads have broken my dreams
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when one deviates from the "cadaver" it lay in utter ruins.
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11-26-2006, 10:19 AM
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The only truth I know- seven years of hex upon my floor,
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clouds that hover, stare at your mind
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11-27-2006, 12:46 PM
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left wide open with the sun to blind
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11-27-2006, 12:52 PM
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it penetrates my mind like cold shards of glass
unwavering in it's influence.
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11-29-2006, 06:29 PM
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communication stifled, it renders me mute
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