Level 7 - Loquacious
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In between my headphones
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Re: One million pixels.
I love it, I can relate to it, it's a battle of tantrism and dualism, yet so clear. Sometimes it seemed to not feel 'poetic' and just be a sentence, but the way you laid out the words and played with metrum, that was the real stuff. Keep it up.
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"I found the remnants of a crescent fang,
it cleaned my wing down to the bone....
Umbillical syllables left to decode,
there was no craddle I can taste it!"
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