a little different...

[Brokenelevator]

Something a little different from the last poem I posted. (My "fuck you america" poem. Hehe. I have a tendency to switch styles of writing frequently, but it's all 100 percent me.)

this is untitled by the way.

~~~~~~~~~~
won't you surround
will you descend
to land next to me
on this waiting planet
surround and cover with
blue wings
protective fatherlike brilliant
silent
your wisdom


won't you come down
surround
survive
your wounds are open
and dry
when i finger them
they feel like plastic organs
you the plastic messiah
i want to defend your
blasphemy
so heal
while i wait for this
to boil

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[Johnny Truant]

Reminds me on Eulogy, it sounds like ur talking about god in a kind of hateful way. Thats what it sounded like to me

[Brokenelevator]

Wow, thanks for your opinion, you gave me a new viewpoint.

Because honestly, this poem wasn't about God at all. Nor was it intended to be hateful.

Hehe.

But seriously, I really appreciate it, it helps me look at myself in a new light, and that's definitely helpful to a writer.

[raiSINgirl420]

i love the first stanza...beautiful.
i like your metaphors... i haven't been on here in awhile, so i am going down through and commenting on a few, i really like this.
:)

i know what you mean about changing styles of writing, i have a ton of styles, i write constantly.
but anyways...instead of rambling i am going to keep reading. :)